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Old Oct 14 2008, 08:10 PM   #1
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This is my second story to VersusXIII. I hope you'll like it. ^^
The name Irwhirri is invented.


~ Irwhirri ~
(Final Fantasy Versus XIII fanfic)

Prolog
"What is it?", Noctis asked the mighty Crystallis.
Crystallis just smiled. She was the last on the guestlist on the prince. Today he celebrated his birthday. The whole city acclaimed it.
After he took away the silk darkblue wrapping paper, he hold a five centimeter large crystal in his Hand. He raised one eye-brow.
"Thank you!", he said to Crystallis. "Nice juwel."
< She has missed her calling >, he thought. < Jeweler would be better for her. >
"Call her!", she demanded him.
"What? How?"
"Irwhirri."
"Okay...Irrwhirri!"
In no time the crystal cleared away. One moment later a little, white creature appeared in front of Noctis. It had a silk fur and emerald-green eyes and big ears like one of the red-golden zilrabbits from the east coast.
"A little Aeon!", he wispered astonished. "What abilities does it has?"
"IT?!", repeated a young voice indignat.
Noctis looked surpeised to his feet.
"I'm no > it <, you...!!", Irwhirri hissed. Then the little Aeon started to cry. "You don't like me...!"
It turned round and ran away, deeper into the palace.
The prince sighted sad.
"I'm sorry", he apologized.
"Irwhirri is a girl", Crystallis accounted. "She is ageless."
"She is one of the Highlords...pardon, Highladys? I thought they left out world five thousand years ago."
Crystallis shook her head.
"Irwhirri is the last guardian of the "hidden powers" in our world. If she goes, every power will disappear for ever."
"Thank's for her! I hope she would forgive me."
"Please be kind to her!", his guest requested. "She has no friends anymore."
"I'll do my best."
"Thank you."

When Crystallis and all the other guests were gone, he searched for Irwhirri. He followed the young voice who sang a sad melody. He found her reclined in a dark corner. He sighted.


~

1st chap will follow soon. ^^



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Old Oct 15 2008, 07:58 PM   #2
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I like this one too.
Although I cannot pronounce the name Irwhirri...
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Old Oct 15 2008, 08:43 PM   #3
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Thanx, Stella! Here it is:

The pronouncing for "Irwhirri":

every > i < is spoken like "irregular",
> w < like "Washington",
the > h < is unspoken.
I've invented this name first for an german story, so every
> r < would be speak in another way, but you can read this letters like you would read them in english.


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Old Oct 15 2008, 08:47 PM   #4
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Oh I liked it! really great Already looking forward to more ^^
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Old Oct 15 2008, 09:17 PM   #5
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I liked it, too. Althouht i like more Just Love. But its unfair i said that since this story in only the begining.
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Old Oct 15 2008, 09:25 PM   #6
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Thanx, Stella! Here it is:

The pronouncing for "Irwhirri":

every > i < is spoken like "irregular",
> w < like "Washington",
the > h < is unspoken.
I've invented this name first for an german story, so every
> r < would be speak in another way, but you can read this letters like you would read them in english.


Oh, thanks! German can be so confusing, the pronouncation mostly.
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Old Oct 16 2008, 02:12 PM   #7
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Thanx, Bluewing and Moklin for reviewing.^^
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Old Oct 16 2008, 02:19 PM   #8
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continue the story. The beginning is nice, but still, it's just the beginning
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Old Oct 16 2008, 02:23 PM   #9
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Thanx, pupu! ^^
Here is the next chap.

Chapter 1

"Hey", Noctis said gently.
Irwhirri turned her head and looked up to him.
"I didn't want to hurt you. I'm sorry."
"I know", she whispered.
The prince was surprised.
"You..."
"I know every thought and every feeling of every person on this planet, Mylord."
Tears fell down her cheeks. They twinkled like little diamonds in the cold light of the moon.
"There is so much pain..."
It seemed that she fell asleep. Noctis raised her up. She was so little that he could carry her on his Arms. He suddenly felt that he was holding the greatest power in his arms. This little fluffy creature owned all hidden powers that were ever given. Noctis also felt the temptation to took all of them. He looked at Irwhirri. His eyes began to glow.

It was late at night when the young woman walked home. The full moon stood over her head on the darkblue nightsky. Suddenly she felt something she can't describe. It was like...a call. She turned around slowly, but there were nobody behind her. She began to shiver.
Abrupt the moon changed his colour into bloody-red. Then he began to glow like when sunlight fell through a grinded rubin. The young woman drawed back. Her face were pale.
Abruptly a young man appeared a few meters in front of her. His eyes were glowing red.
"Mylord!", she whispered scared.
He didn't say a word and just came closer. One footstep away from her he stopped.
"You're my opponent!", he exclaimed.
He called his swords and struck out. The blond haired woman cannot even shout. She was frozen. Suddenly she saw a big shadow who jumped before her. It sparkled. An Aeon has absorbed the attack.
"Don't be scared!", it called out to her. "I'll protect you!"
Flames came out his mouth.
"What's your name?", she asked him.
"Ifrit."
"Nice to meet you, Ifrit! I'm Stella."
"My pleasure, Lady Stella."
"Wait a moment!", she said. "You are Ifrit? You are a Fireaeon, aren't you?"
Ifrit sighted and rolled his eyes.
"Yes. May I protect you now?"
Stella nodded. Ilfrit opened his mouth and formed a fireball. Then he kicked it at Noctis, who crowed. The fireball exploded above his head and the shockwave pulled him down to the ground.
Ilfrit already formed the next fireball when suddenly Irwhirri appeared near Noctis. The Fireaeon stopped and gazed at the little Aeon. Noctis was insensible.
"You, Highlady Irwhirri?", Ilfrit asked astonished. "Where were you the last three thousand years? We've looked for you!"
The guardian turned around.
"It's a pleasure for me to meet you Ilfrit Ellence. I apologice that you guys became troubles in the past. Please send Dark Bahamut my excuse."
"I will!", he countered. "I will not fight against you, my Highlady."
"Please, don't call me that", she said quietly. "I'm only Irwhirri for you all."
"O...okay."
"Farewell, you two", the little Aeon said and cleared away with Noctis.


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It's a little short, I know. It will continue.
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I think it's great, although I kinda got lost abit in the middle, but rereading it made me understand it, good work!
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Old Oct 16 2008, 05:56 PM   #11
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Thanx, Bluewing.^^
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Old Oct 17 2008, 04:53 AM   #12
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good job... i liked it... keep writing i can't wait to hear more
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Old Oct 17 2008, 09:30 AM   #13
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Another good one, keep writing, hehe.
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Old Oct 24 2008, 10:59 AM   #14
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It's interesting. I want to know what happens next.
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Old Oct 24 2008, 11:10 AM   #15
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Ifrit Ellence. Nice. A summon with surname. I like it. And passion for ffx I see. Like Aeons^^
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Old Oct 24 2008, 11:33 AM   #16
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A story with aeons, it looks very promising, the name Irwhirri sounds cute and singular ^^ a good name. Are you write german storys too?
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