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Old Aug 17 2008, 08:33 PM   #1
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Lightbulb OK, here's what I think will be the scenario for FFXIII (Final version).

Just to say this is pretty much the same as my old scenario but Lightning is now 100% woman but her mind and mentality is that of a man. It's therefore not as extreme as the whole chick with a **** idea I was throwing down on the table before.

As before, first off the part of the story that is confirmed by SQEX:

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A Crystal represents Cocoon (the floating utopia) and another represents Pulse (the lush land below). Both Crystals decide the destinies of their inhabitants before they are born. Lightning is from Cocoon but for some weird reason the Crystal of Cocoon has given her the destiny of "Destroying Cocoon". The government of Cocoon are very extreme in terms of protecting Cocoon and exile anybody who they believe to be contaminated with the outside world to Pulse.

So the player controls Lightning and tries to accomplish this goal and to quote Motomu Toriyama, “During the early parts of the game the player will question if what they are doing is right or not.”
OK, now here’s where I want it to go from here. This is my brief take on the possible scenario:

Eventually 20 hours into the game Lightning says, "So that's why I feel like a man trapped inside a woman's body."

It turns out her Father was from Cocoon and her Mother from Pulse. The Crystals from Cocoon and Pulse decide the destinies for the inhabiting people before they are born but because she was the only ever mixed person her destiny got mixed up. The Crystal from Cocoon had her destined to be a man who would be a confident and very powerful soldier for the Cocoon army but also very virtuous and kind. The one from Pulse had her destined to be a woman who would be very beautiful. She also discovers that both her parents were brutally tortured and executed by Cocoon’s government when their relationship got discovered. They managed to hide Lightning and she was raised by her father’s sister who kept her identity a secret.

To make things worse for her, the Crystal of Pulse had given her the destiny of “Protecting Cocoon”. This is the exact opposite of the destiny she was given by the Crystal of Cocoon which she had been trying to accomplish for the first 20 hours of the game.

Realising all this Lightning becomes depressed like Cloud in AC as she doesn’t know what to do and which destiny to fulfil. Should she be a man and fulfil her destiny given to her by Cocoon or be a woman and fulfil the destiny given to her by Pulse? She begins to think that there is no clear direction she should take in her life and that her parents mixed relationship has resulted in her destiny getting completely messed up.

Roll in the famous AC scene in that dark room but this time in a dark room in place on Pulse:

Aquarium (Black female party member with similar personality to Tifa in AC; Lightning’s closest friend in the party): You have two destinies don’t you? So you’re not going to fulfil either, is that it?

*Silence*

Aquarium: So it is…

Lightning: I don’t know which one I should fulfil.

Aquarium: Yeah but don’t give up on both. Let’s work together, we can find out which one is the right one, I know we can! But I guess that’s something that will be difficult to figure out…

Lightning: Aquarium. I’m not in the position to fulfil anything. Not destroying Cocoon. Not protecting it. Nothing.

Aquarium: Dilly-dally, shilly-shally.

It is eventually discovered that the government of Cocoon have prepared a canon of mass destruction that they plan to fire on Pulse that will completely destroy it and leave it a barren wasteland devoid of life and vegetation. They are doing this as an extreme way of preventing Cocoon being contaminated by the outside world. Hearing this, Lightning eventually comes to the decision to fulfil the destiny given to her by the Crystal of Cocoon and thus to destroy Cocoon.

Roll on another AC scene, this time the scene where Cloud arrives at the Bahamut Sin fight scene on Fenrir:

Lightning: The other party members are ready; they’re waiting at the inn.

Aquarium: *Nods*

Lightning: I think I have a purpose now.

Aquarium: *Surprised expression*

Lightning: I’ve chosen a destiny to fulfil.

Aquarium: *Biggest smile EVER!*

So Lightning begins to once again follow the destiny she was following for the first 20 hours of the game.

At this point in the game the main antagonist starts to get major screen time. He’s an incredibly rich person who refuses to follow the destiny given to him by the Crystals that involves “Becoming a charity worker and spending his money on the poor” and believes pre-destination strips humanity of the choice to do what they want in life. He makes it his destiny to “Destroy the Crystals”.

Lightning and her party stop the canon but don’t destroy it. After doing this they realise that Cocoon has completely changed in a split second. It turns out that the main antagonist has destroyed the Crystal which has affected everything in Cocoon. The main antagonist then becomes almighty like a God and has acquired all the powers of the Crystal of Cocoon. He completely takes over Cocoon and kills the whole government but his powers have no affect on Pulse. He makes his own laws and everyone must follow them. People also must not follow their destinies but do what ever the **** they want now. It isn't long before Cocoon becomes the total opposite of the civilised utopia it used to be. However, there are many people still living in Cocoon who secretly follow their destinies due to their love of the Crystal. Once these people are found by the main antagonist’s personal elite police force that uphold his laws they are arrested and executed.

Lightning and the party return to Pulse and start hunting for the Crystal of Pulse to protect it and ensure the main antagonist doesn’t find it before they do. Upon reaching it the Crystal speaks to Lightning calling her by the name Nivaya which is in fact her real name. It tells her that she has two destinies deliberately and what they really are.

Instead of Cocoon Crystal saying, “Destroy Cocoon” and Pulse Crystal saying “Protect Cocoon”, it was in fact Cocoon Crystal saying, “Destroy the city of Cocoon” and the Pulse Crystal saying “Protect the people of Cocoon”.

It also tells her the meaning of Nivaya is “From the voice of both Crystals”.

Nivaya and the party move the Crystal to a secret location and then go off to their last battle in Cocoon. Once they beat the main antagonist he transforms into a God like form and they fight him again. When they beat him at at last they begin to find a way to make the place explode as without no Crystal there is little point for the place existing and it’s already pretty much ****ed as it currently is. They realise a way and they then begin evacuating people to Pulse. When everyone including the party is down on Pulse they remote detonate the Bomb only to find nothing happen. Nivaya says she’s going back alone to see what’s going on.

Aquarium says she’s going too but Nivaya tells her to stay. Aquarium promises her to come back in one piece to which Nivaya nods and smiles and says “Of course.”

When she reaches Cocoon she meets the main antagonist waiting for her and he has launched the canon that was aimed at Pulse and it will fire soon. This leads to an EPIC battle taking place all over Cocoon much like the Sephiroth and Cloud fight that took place all over Midgar at the end of AC. What makes this fight even more badass is that the main antagonist can control everything in Cocoon so he’s like using his powers to throw buildings and Sky scrapers at Nivaya. Of course by this stage in the game Nivaya can duel wield, so she can cut through whole buildings like a badass. You even get to see her passing through all the floors and actually see the furniture in the buildings while she's slicing and dicing her way through them. It's all truly an epic sight to behold.

Nivaya wins eventually and starts to try and turn off the canon but the main antagonist had used his God like abilities over Cocoon to prevent it from being turned off and there are 10 minutes till it fires. The only way to stop the Canon would be to blow up Cocoon now. Nivaya then begins to think what to do and thinks about her destinies and how she is so close to fulfilling both of them.

Nivaya says, “My destiny is to destroy the city of Cocoon and protect the people of Cocoon. If I blow myself up with Cocoon I will both destroy Cocoon and also protect the people of Cocoon who are now down on Pulse from the Canon that is about to fire.”

She comes to the conclusion that she should go down with Cocoon. The people on Pulse suddenly see Cocoon explode and Aquarium is like “WTF? But Nivaya is not back yet.”

After a few hours she still doesn’t show and Aquarium realises she is not coming back and burst into tears. Everyone on Pulse is shocked she could do something like that especially her party members. She becomes an honoured hero and people see her as a “Chosen Hero” and “Special” seeing as she was given destinies from both Crystals.

Time passes and Cocoon becomes a memory and all the people of Cocoon have now mixed in with the people of Pulse. The Crystal of Pulse has now become the single Crystal that creates a destiny for every new born person seeing as everyone now lives on Pulse.

END.

Something like this please Motomu Toriyama!

It’s not too extreme in the transgender department either so the detractors of my other scenario shouldn't feel this one is too off the beaten path.
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Old Aug 18 2008, 06:25 AM   #2
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Interesting, but maybe something less like Final Fantasy VII.
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Old Aug 18 2008, 11:44 AM   #3
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I read until I realised you're not only try to guess the whole plot, but dialogue as well Oh, and that it all was pretty retarded.

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Aquarium: Dilly-dally, shilly-shally.
Fucking hell. Do you even know what an Aquarium is? They're not going to name a character Aquarium.
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Old Aug 18 2008, 11:55 AM   #4
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That was embarassing. I couldn't finish.
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Old Aug 18 2008, 02:15 PM   #5
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I wanted to stop reading at "so this is what it feels like to be trapped in a woman's body" but I waited to stop at the dilly dally shilly shally part...
omg too much fucking final fantasy VII *gags*
that was fucking retarded.....I hate people that guess plots...why bother?
I seriously want to know why people spend this much time thinking about it.
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Old Aug 18 2008, 02:39 PM   #6
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Its seems more like a fan fic to me.
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Old Aug 18 2008, 03:30 PM   #7
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I started this reply quoting everyone who replied to my thread but then I thought, "Why bother?"

To sum up, I'm happy if you're feeling the scenario but it's also no biggie if you're not feeling the scenario. I'll just make that clear now before everyone starts jumping in on the negative reply train and start drilling me or the scenario because they don't like it.

People are actually complaining by saying "Too much like FFVII"? Where the fuck have you people been? FFXIII is meant to be the successor to FFVII. They even threw in the female Cloud and Midgar-like city.

I only added dialogue to show the emotions the characters may feel at the time. I wanted to use scenes we have seen before in FF to paint the picture so I used dialogue parts of AC. I'm just using AC scenes and dialogue as an example of the emotions of the characters at that perticular point in the game. Not saying those exact words will be in it.

Regarding Aquarium as a name? Why judge the name when you know nothing about her as a character or her history and where she's from? In fact, go and look up what Kadaj and Yazoo mean in Japanese then get back to me.
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Old Aug 18 2008, 03:51 PM   #8
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There will not be a character named Aquarium
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Old Aug 18 2008, 03:53 PM   #9
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There will not be a character named Aquarium
I agree. In fact I'm not even sure Nomura is even designed a black character in this game or Versus XIII.

I still stand by the fact that it's not off the wall to have a character called Aquarium in a Final Fantasy game though.

EDIT: Wait, I just realised something; people are judging my scenario by how likely it will happen. That's a misunderstanding of why I made this thread. It was more how I personally would like the scenario to play out according to what we know about it so far.

It wasn't really fan-fiction or prediction but more being given snippets about the story of FFXIII and then making a full scenario about it. I was not predicting the scenario of FFXII but just posting how I would like it to play out judging by what we know so far. If it still sucks according to you, then that's just me dealing with your criticism.
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this made me want to jump out the window. It's too much!! No point of doing this, we know too little about the game.

Dilly-Dally-Shilly-Shally? seriously... DUDE!!
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this made me want to jump out the window. It's too much!! No point of doing this, we know too little about the game.

Dilly-Dally-Shilly-Shally? seriously... DUDE!!
If you read my other replies in this thread you'll see what the point of this thread was. You'll also see why I added in the AC scene and script.
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"EDIT: Wait, I just realised something; people are judging my scenario by how likely it will happen. That's a misunderstanding of why I made this thread. It was more how I personally would like the scenario to play out according to what we know about it so far."

Isn't the topic name: "OK, here's what I think will be the scenario for FFXIII (Final version)."? So, is it how you personally prefer the game to play out, or how you think it will play out?

And let me get this straight, you DO realize just exactly WHAT an aquarium is? Cause to me it doesn't really make any sense if a character is named after a big glass cube filled with water where you keep your fishes...
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Well then get ready to be criticized because that was like reading a terrible fanfiction, about a cross over of FF XIII with FF VII. I am happy to say that the way you want it to play out, will never come to be. So have fun imagining how you wish it was X)
P.S. if anyone is going to kill themselves its going to be the Prince XD
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Isn't the topic name: "OK, here's what I think will be the scenario for FFXIII (Final version)."? So, is it how you personally prefer the game to play out, or how you think it will play out?

That's my mistake. This thread was more "Here's what we know about FFXIII and here's how I'd like it to play out".

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And let me get this straight, you DO realize just exactly WHAT an aquarium is? Cause to me it doesn't really make any sense if a character is named after a big glass cube filled with water where you keep your fishes...
Yeah, I know, but I was primarily after the sound rather than what the word means. It started as Aqua but that's been taken by some hot anime chick in Kingdom Hearts: Birth by Sleep. So I added to the name and reached "Aquarium".

I didn't want to go into detail about her as a character as it would make this scenario too long and hardly anybody would read it. Here are some small points about her.

- She has blue hair
- Her clothes are made out of water.
- Though she's human, she's a member of race that live under Pulse in a place that's all water. Think "The Little Mermaid" without the half fish body.
- Her parents own a "fish farm" and look after rare species of fish and as a result she was given that name when she was born.

Still think the names retarded? Well that's FF. There have been worse names in the series.

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Well then get ready to be criticized because that was like reading a terrible fanfiction, about a cross over of FF XIII with FF VII.
You do know that Motomu Toriyama is writing right? I have nothing against the guy, I'm enjoying the story of FFXII: RW which I'm currently playing but you should not get your hopes up too high. This games story may be a straight clone of FFVII.

This is not Kazushige Nojima writing that the Yoshinori Kitase fans expect. He did pen the whole mythology behind the Fabula Nova Crystallis though but he isn’t writing for any of the games.
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At first I thought this was a joke, especially with the whole man inside a woman's body (I began wondering if she was going to get gender reassignment by the end haha)...so I was laughing, and then I realized you were serious, and I stopped laughing. I kept reading it...it hurt, but it was like watching a train wreck...you know you want to look away, you need to, but you just CAN'T, haha

I'm sorry, you're allowed to dream whatever you want for the story, my opinion is that it's ridiculous, is all. It did sound an awful lot like a terrible fan fiction, although I've seen worse, haha.

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At first I thought this was a joke, especially with the whole man inside a woman's body (I began wondering if she was going to get gender reassignment by the end haha)...so I was laughing, and then I realized you were serious, and I stopped laughing. I kept reading it...it hurt, but it was like watching a train wreck...you know you want to look away, you need to, but you just CAN'T, haha

I'm sorry, you're allowed to dream whatever you want for the story, my opinion is that it's ridiculous, is all. It did sound an awful lot like a terrible fan fiction, although I've seen worse, haha.

Nice try though
You know, if we get a story worse than this I will laugh to myself so hard when I think of the people who were not feeling my scenario.

It's cool though, I know FF fans that thought it was good on other boards and others who thought it was terrible. It's all personal taste really. The same way some people say FFXII has good story and others say there isn't even a story in the game.
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*claps* that was so cool! I mean it was so ridiculous that it made me laugh, I mean, Aquarium- that's a funny name. And the 'dilly-dally shilly-shally' part was so weird. Actually the part when you said Lightning felt like a man in a woman's body made me want to continue on. Its okay to imagine how you think the game or whatever i going to be like but I definitely don't think its going to be like that. You should consider making a fanfiction out of this though, granted it needs a few improvements but it could still make an interesting story.
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this is like one of those horrible auditions for the X-Factor, except it's giving ideas for games.
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this is like one of those horrible auditions for the X-Factor, except it's giving ideas for games.
Except that the X-Fatcor judges don't know shit and are not that great as critics.
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