I've been cured...hopefully.

[Chick]

Bye Bye!!!

[Gaia]

Wow...I love it! Its written really well and the sentences flow beautifully; and I can't see any grammar errors so far. But I have no idea what's going on, but that's okay because its a prologue right? Then I understand; but i'm not saying its perfect...i'm not sure I've read any story that is 100% perfect, even by the bestselling authors. There's always room for improvement, but already you seem to be off to a good start!
By the way you have very good description, I was able to visualize very well what the main character is doing...whoever he is.
Are you going to post the first chapter anytime soon? I'd love to read that one too

-Gaia

[Chick]

Originally Posted by Gaia

Wow...I love it! Its written really well and the sentences flow beautifully; and I can't see any grammar errors so far. But I have no idea what's going on, but that's okay because its a prologue right? Then I understand; but i'm not saying its perfect...i'm not sure I've read any story that is 100% perfect, even by the bestselling authors. There's always room for improvement, but already you seem to off to a good start!
By the way you have very good description, I was able to visualize very well what the main character is doing...whoever he is.
Are you going to post the first chapter anytime soon? I'd love to read that one too

-Gaia

Thank you!! It was meant to be vague, but I'm still deciding whether or not I'm going to change it or not. The first chapter is far from being ready, so I'm not sure if I'll post it or not. I have to get through the other story first before I really start on this one. But it means a lot to me that you even read this, so thanks again!

[VeraAlexander]

Great job i love it can't add anything more sorry but i think you got over your writers block

[-Solid_Rain-]

like Gaia said, the description is awesome. I could visualize everything going on, glass trickling down the arm, hard to imagine, but your style described it very well.

[Chick]

Originally Posted by -Solid_Rain-

like Gaia said, the description is awesome. I could visualize everything going on, glass trickling down the arm, hard to imagine, but your style described it very well.

Thanks. It's such a weird power he has, so it's hard to describe. But I'm glad I was able to describe it enough for it to be somewhat perceivable.

[Gaia]

Originally Posted by Dann

Thank you!! It was meant to be vague, but I'm still deciding whether or not I'm going to change it or not. The first chapter is far from being ready, so I'm not sure if I'll post it or not. I have to get through the other story first before I really start on this one. But it means a lot to me that you even read this, so thanks again!

No problem! I love reading other people's stuff, well good luck on it and I hope that you don't get anymore writer's block! (I seriously hate it when I get those things)