What would you change?

[Callie]

If I could change one thing, it would be less linearity.

If I could change 2 things, the 2nd would be to do away with the chocofro.

[Mr. Biggles]

Shorten Chapter 9 and chapter 10, and maybe shorten Gapra Whitewood. They dragged a little for me.

[Mr.Marzipan]

If any chapter needs to be shortened, it's Chapter 7. That was the only chapter that I felt dragged, although there were some nice pay-offs.