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Rikku
Jun 07 2007, 02:26 AM
Aydolon
The epic adventure with a working title.
By Rikku/Karen C.

A/n: H'okay. So. This all started with an argument with my friend. I hate Eragon. He loves it. And then he tells me that I can't write a book better than it -- HOHO! That's where you're wrong, buddy! XD Basically I have to get a book published by before I'm 18... then he owes me 15 bucks. =D

I haven't actually started writing, per se. I planned the basic plot for 2 hours (not really... that's including slacking and procrastination time... and it's hardly the 'basic' plot either o_O) and got it down on paper; it's around 4 pages verdana font size 10. And that's the only outline. Hurray, I can't wait to start writing! /sarcasm

I would post the outline, if only to get critique and general suggestions... but it's kind of hard with a word limit (actually, why would you let people post stories here if there's a word limit..?)




Retarded summary... seriously, I can't summarize things:

When Lucy wakes up near a train station, the last thing she can recall is being knocked out by somebody on the way home from school just as she exited the subway station. But this was a different station, and definitely a different city entirely.

No, scratch that. She's in an entirely different world, now, and a strange phenomenon has occurred: She can't say her name. Lucy's been politely informed that she has to 'find her name' within the next 14 months, or else she'll suffer a terrible death... Simple task, right? No. How the hell are you supposed to find a NAME? And how would you be able to do that when a mysterious and devious demon empress is out to capture you?

But who is the empress Kalloni? And why is she out to get Lucy so desperately; what are her actual intentions? And who is this boy named Chrysander?

'And why the hell,' Lucy thought furiously, 'am I part of a clichéd sounding prophecy?!'



I'm gonna start writing, maybe, tomorrow? Or if somebody wants I'll post a link to my long-winded plot outline. u_u

Lifrasthir
Jun 07 2007, 02:29 AM
WAH! WRITE NOW!!! :D I wanna read your story! :'( I'll become an addict like Cathryn's story.

Askyria
Jun 07 2007, 02:33 AM
Oh, boy, brace yourself for Karen's walls of text XD

...LOL, Chrysander. Jen and I used that for our math project as the name of a hot dog with legs. Her idea. XD

Rikku
Jun 07 2007, 02:35 AM
Actually, I'm pretty sure she got it from Alysha (she was 'CHRYSANDER MAN OF ULTIMATE MANLINESS' in her eng radio project), who got it from me. I wanted a totally retarded name for a total ass of a character for a story I was attempting to write a while ago... I ditched the story and used some of the elements in this one.

And TF, I'll get to writing soon. I swear.

PH34R MY WALLS OF TEXT!

Devious
Jun 07 2007, 02:36 AM
lolzorz I can never write anyting exceeding 3 pages.


And in my opinion, cliched fantasy is kind ghey. lol @ Socrates. Would it kill you to make the names original? :rolleyes:

The plot's pretty good. The ending's sad though. Just when you start loving the characters... They die. =(

If you want a good name, how about Bobbinthorn? Or Frankenhirtzel? Or Helga?

Askyria
Jun 07 2007, 02:39 AM
lolzorz I can never write anyting exceeding 3 pages.


And in my opinion, cliched fantasy is kind ghey.

8D Join the club. Unless I spend hours on end trying to elaborate I barely get over 2 pages.

@Karen: LOL oh, that radio project.

...Does Filip still have the tape? D:

Rikku
Jun 07 2007, 02:40 AM
@Jason: Cliches in general are retarded if you can't use them correctly. It's a good thing that I can. XD The fundamental idea was really cliched but I think I've done a good job twisting them. Did I send you the plot outline?

And you CAN write stuff exceeding three pages. The quality is questionable, though...

(MISS CLARK APPROVES OF CLICHES IN MY STORIES LOLX!!!111one)

@Cheryl: Ours was crazy...
Anyway, I have the tape, but the case got murdered. Like, totaled. Somebody fell on my bag on the ttc and consequently crushed a lot of things including my pencils and some books. u_u solly. The tape, I think, is in perfect condition though.

Rikku
Jun 07 2007, 11:26 PM
Story rated PG-13. I went, uh, slightly detailed with the violent part, but nothing really sickening since I felt lazy. It's a weak opening. I think I'll write another prologue later~

00. Prologue

It all started with a particularly terrible lunch period. Somehow, just somehow, Lucy’s lack of balance and stability lead to her rolling down the elevation of land that her school was located on. She wasn’t even quite sure how it had happened, considering the fact that she was merely running near the small cliff as she had before and the whole reason that she had lost her balance in the first place was because she tripped over her friend’s jacket.

And, well, her friend was wearing the jacket at the time – yeah, it made no sense. . . (http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2373065/1/)

EDIT: Link fixed

Lifrasthir
Jun 08 2007, 01:44 AM
"You must be logged in to view this page." :'( I can't read your story without an account. *signs up* :D

Rikku
Jun 08 2007, 01:45 AM
Huh. I think I'm an idiot. x_X

I posted the wrong link. OHOH. New link:
http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2373065/1/

Lifrasthir
Jun 08 2007, 01:46 AM
Oh, heheheheh. :D But I'll still sign up after I read the looong Terms of Use.

Rikku
Jun 08 2007, 01:52 AM
ah, okay. XD you're actually gonna read through that? at most, I always just skim through those things... >>;

Lifrasthir
Jun 08 2007, 02:02 AM
Well I do skim but...it's different than Fanfiction.net so...yeah.

Alphonse
Jun 08 2007, 02:21 AM
Sounds like a good story! Really good!

Rikku
Jun 08 2007, 02:34 AM
Thanks, Cloud Rulez~ :3 I really appreciate the comment. <3

Alphonse
Jun 08 2007, 02:37 AM
Youre welcome! Youre good like your buddy! *Applause!* I hope you keep it goin! I wonder what happens to the girl!

Lifrasthir
Jun 08 2007, 02:41 AM
o_____o It's so awesome Rikku!

Rikku
Jun 08 2007, 02:45 AM
Wai~ thanks, TF. 8D I'm glad you like it.
And Cloud Rulez... if that's the case, you'll be mildly disappointed with the next chapter 'cause I'm not going back to the girl and her issues for a little while. ;D Hopefully I'll do as just as well with the double story.

Misschoco
Jun 08 2007, 07:57 PM
Huh. I think I'm an idiot. x_X

I posted the wrong link. OHOH. New link:
http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2373065/1/
dang.......it kinda freaked me out....but it was one hell of a good story :rolleyes:

Alphonse
Jun 08 2007, 08:00 PM
Man! Well thats to bad! I bet its going to be good though!